This waa penned after a request from A Member of the Public to put words to a piece of music he had composed. Challenge Accepted!

In my first life

Sharp as a blunt knife

I was undone

Epic slam-dunk fail

In my first life

A cold ex wife

Took me down good

Days were darker then

–

Now I’m older

A mossy boulder

Re-visioned eyes

Give a different view

Now I’m older

Chip-free shoulder

I’m shot of the hole

That I struggled through

PC

A reason to live again

A season to give again

A breeze in my sails again,

Second wind

CH

All my life I sinned

Till I found a second wind

[optional] I’ve got my second wind.

Me, I was wild

I was reviled

Off to the cells

I was sinking alone

I was so wild

I was exiled

Jail was no friend

I was sinking alone

Faced with this lens

I found my sense

Started up again

It was do that or die

Books were my friends

Making amends

Starting again

I studied and grew

BR

Panic kinda feels loud

Like the sound of a plane

Spinning out of control

Down down

–

In my first life

I caused the strife

I blame no one

Days were darker then

Now from seeking

Light is leaking

Through a cracked hole

I have whittled out

–

The reason to live again

A season to give again

A breeze in my sails again,

Second wind

CH

Got those troubles pinned

When I found my second wind

[optional] I’ve got my second wind.

The reason to live again

A season to give again

A breeze in my sails again,

Second wind

–

[Optional] It’s like I was reskinned

When I found my second wind

[optional] I’ve got my second wind.

Second wind

Second wind

Second wind

Copyright: Rod de lisle – lyrics . A Member of the Public – music

FEEDBACK.

On 27/09/2023 at 08:09, CorkingCrackBand said:

“It’s no easy job to write lyrics to specific beats so big well done to Rod. It can be quite the restraint and you’ve done a great job. “

On 28/09/2023 at 12:03, sumonicky said:

“good and efficient lyrics from Rod”

On 28/09/2023 at 12:46, Jack DeValera said:

.”.and backed up by some wonderful lyrics.”

10 hours ago, DullRoar said:

“Another good job” “@Rod de Lisle I like the words. Knowing that they were dictated by a melody didn’t help my enjoyment, but knowing that really shows your proficiency in the task at hand. Which is what impressed Aldo as well, I am sure.”

Thanks all for surprisingly positive feedback. Surprising as I wasn’t totally happy with the lyric in places and was expecting to be slammed on those. (However it’s hard to rhyme “life” with much more than “strife” or “knife”😉)  … I have spent much more time on other lyrics, this one was a little rushed, so I feel it has potential to be improved. 
 

The music here is great though. I found myself humming it the other day, it’s catchy and I love the tremelo guitar effect. And I really like the backing voices double tracked onto fourth line of each verse. Genius.